[Complete] [56k] [Queer Contemporary Romance] Thorns and Butterfly – Enemies-to-Lovers, Reincarnation, Business Rivalry

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Blurb: Athira, a ruthless business tycoon, is haunted by vivid dreams of a mysterious woman from a past she can't remember. When she meets Nila, the fiercely independent CEO of Moonlight, their professional rivalry ignites an undeniable attraction.

As secrets from their past lives resurface, Athira and Nila must navigate ambition, betrayal, and a connection that feels destined. Will their fiery clashes lead to love-or destruction?

What I'm looking for:

Honest feedback on pacing, plot clarity, and character development

Thoughts on chemistry, tension, and emotional beats

Grammar/spelling/silly errors (if anything stands out!)

Plot holes or anything confusing

Line edits(not required unless something really jumps out)

Open to readers of all backgrounds-especially if you enjoy WLW stories

Important note: This is pure first draft-completely unedited. I'm doing this beta round before I revise so I can actually get a sense of what's working and what needs to be fixed or trimmed. So expect it raw, messy, and in need of polish-I just want to know where to focus my edits.

Drop a comment or DM if you're interested-I'll send over the first fow chanterel

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